Peer Editing: 04/10/2018

In this practice class, we had to make groups of two people and exchange our writings in order to peer edit them. I had to peer edit my partner's and my partner had to peer edit mine.

This is my partner's writing: 

"Cellphone manners" (María Teresa Ortuño López, B1).

At first, all of us should be polite when somebody is talking to. In a conversation, it isn't correct to chat someone with the cellphone, while a person is trying to speak with us. 
Secondly, if we are in a place that requires silence, we have to put the phone in silence to respect the other people around us. 
At last, when we walk in the streets, we must to pay attention to avoid running into someone.

When I peer edited this text, I suggested some things:

• I think the paragraph enumerates well the different aspects of it, it's a good job!
• In my opinion the paragraph should have both a Topic Sentence and a Concluding Sentence to organize better the information and not to give the sensation of missing something.
• There are four supporting sentences that empower the topic correctly.
• It's really good that the writer uses transition signals to support the SSs. They are also well-placed at the beginning of each sentence. Examples: At first, secondly and at last.
• The writing technique that it's used is examplification, which is good because you can make the readers understand better the concept of the paragraph.
• It is used clear and simple sentences. However, I would prefer longer or more explained sentences.
• I can't find any errors in the structure of the paragraph, the information is organized.
• Finally, the writer tries not to be repetitibe and that is amazing.